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Starry Nights by *Day-Dreamer07:iconDay-Dreamer07:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


I still smelled like you this morning.
I sensed your essence around my shoulders,
where your arms were last night.

When I close my eyes,
You’re here again.
Holding me with your concerned affection.

You said I seemed depressed.
If I was before,
(I’m not recalling)
I’m perfect now.
Safe in your holding.

The stars aren’t out tonight.
But your glowing kindness,
Makes up for the darkness of reality.
It always does.

Alas, as your aroma
fades from my skin,
The close feeling does as well.

But I hope,
Maybe someday,
I won’t need your essence,
Because you’ll be mine always.
And I’ll be yours.

Then every night can be starry.
©2005-2009 *Day-Dreamer07
:iconday-dreamer07:

Author's Comments

It's sweet, and it's heartfelt. And by request of ~darkone2000 it doesn't ryme! ;p

I went out with Emevas last weekend. The next morning at work was slow, and this was the result. Enjoy, I hope....

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~AirySoul Aug 26, 2005, 6:04:47 PM
i like that it doesn't rhyme. and you still got your message across.
i like alot. keep it up! :hug:

--
Poetry is my sanity.
My advice:
:D Be you, and don't let anyone tell you different. :D
:iconday-dreamer07:
*Day-Dreamer07 Aug 26, 2005, 6:05:53 PM
Thanks.:) :hug:
That means a lot, really.:)

--
Wordsmith, Retail Associate, Americorps Volunteer,
PFS tutor, and Prevention specialist
looking to use her creative writing degree...creatively. :)

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~SkyOfGlass Aug 26, 2005, 6:16:21 PM
Poems never have to rhyme! Some of the best poems I know don't rhyme. I love both styles personally.

ahhhh whenever somebody says advanced critique encouraged I feel all intimidated like I'm not advanced enough to critique haha, so I'll just do my non-advanced rambling because that is how I get points across.

I think this is great, it's just such a feel-good poem, but it has so much meaning.

It makes me all mushy!
:iconairysoul:
~AirySoul Aug 26, 2005, 6:31:12 PM
:hug:

--
Poetry is my sanity.
My advice:
:D Be you, and don't let anyone tell you different. :D
:iconoldmagic55:
~OldMagic55 Aug 26, 2005, 7:37:48 PM
aoww lovely~

--
If you hear a voice within you say 'you cannot paint,' then by all means paint, and that voice will be silenced.

-Vincent Van Gogh
:iconaellawind:
~AellaWind Aug 26, 2005, 8:38:42 PM
that was sweet... i prefer rhyming poems myself, but this had a nice meaning :nod:

--
If you have to think about whether you love someone or not, then the answer is no.
When you love someone... you just know.

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:iconday-dreamer07:
*Day-Dreamer07 Aug 27, 2005, 3:27:27 AM
I love both styles of poetry as well.:)
It's just that everytime I have a ryming poem, ~darkone2000 will say She likes it, but she wishes it wouldn't ryme. oO I made the comment that she should realy like it.:)
I wasn't trying to order one to give me advanced critique, I just fugured that would encourage someone who enjoys it can rip me a new one and make the poem better.:)

Thanks for your kind words.:hug:

--
Wordsmith, Retail Associate, Americorps Volunteer,
PFS tutor, and Prevention specialist
looking to use her creative writing degree...creatively. :)

[link] ~ The Fresh Story
~Gemi-QuarianStock ~ Stock :D
:iconday-dreamer07:
*Day-Dreamer07 Aug 27, 2005, 3:28:40 AM
thankies.:hug:

--
Wordsmith, Retail Associate, Americorps Volunteer,
PFS tutor, and Prevention specialist
looking to use her creative writing degree...creatively. :)

[link] ~ The Fresh Story
~Gemi-QuarianStock ~ Stock :D
:iconday-dreamer07:
*Day-Dreamer07 Aug 27, 2005, 3:30:34 AM
Thank you. I was worried it was too bland actually. :hug:

--
Wordsmith, Retail Associate, Americorps Volunteer,
PFS tutor, and Prevention specialist
looking to use her creative writing degree...creatively. :)

[link] ~ The Fresh Story
~Gemi-QuarianStock ~ Stock :D
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